How do you like my poem?

Actually it's quite good! It lacks a meter or consistent flow but somehow it's content is good enough to overcome that. A few suggestions if they don't change your meaning too much---for the sake of the flow----"For not even the dim of darkness"-----"And it lit up all her beauty---"Her hair, her eyes, her skin"------"When it's nothing less than freedom--"With all your time you seek"----You've got talent, Keep Reading and Writing------------------william